RW WK4: Miracle vs Slayerr.

[Bag Mandela]

Regular Battle
Bars due Saturday 16th Nov
Public voting closes Monday
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Overall public vote = 1 vote
MV’s vote = 1 vote
Bags vote = 1 vote
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6 lines each (doesn’t have to be 3 bars with a set up, punch format, you have creative freedom)



Posting explanations / references below your bars is strongly recommended.
Rebuttals, late drops (unless you have a 24hr ext) & no shows are an instant loss.

MV & I will reach a conclusion on bar of the week & the winner will receive $20 to purchase a small quantity of narcotics.

@miracle @Slayerr.

[miracle]

Check

[Slayerr.]

Let’s ave it

[Slayerr.]

Come on man, I’m running outta material

If the archives demise, ur lack of ability will surprises us all, when the mighty fall n u can’t beat a turd
So eat a sweet treat, lemon curdy zest, coz It’ll turn his world backwards n leave him so stressed; he’ll try n eat that word

It’s hard to save the horrible smell of grime with aftershave to mask ur house n it’s a waste of time
Coz you’ll never go on a night out pull a girl who’s pleased u walk her home
So its always preceded by “leave me da fu” when a girl mentions ur cologne

My right alone should leave him in need of medical attention so much he can’t front;
I’ll make this pussy bleed n start calling him tampon n not just because he’s a stuck up cunt


Expo
Leave him backwards and stressed - stressed backwards is desserts

[miracle]

I might need ext til tomorrow

[Slayerr.]

I might need ext til tomorrow

Word as long as you need

[miracle]

Sorry buddy .. busy af lately


With the chrome I’ll ruin ya home.. family mourning, ya mother left sick
If slay ever has his 9 millimeter out… hes probably pissing with his tiny little dick

Ya chicks such a slut.. so many dudes have murdered it
Ask people whos the biggest whore they’ll say slay queen… like gay dudes giving encouragement

Ain’t nothing u can do to win this.. losses follow where ever this man goes
Anything u trial end faster than your subscription to bangbros

[Jack Hallows]

not bad.

Vote - miracle

a lot going on in Slayerr’s verse. felt kinda rushed. very wordy & awkward in parts. the second bar was the best but the set double setup was kinda overkill could’ve been condensed, cuz it kinda took away from the impact of the punch of an otherwise fire concept. i think the oversetup kinda killed the momentum. last bar, eh tampon/pussy has been flipped a few times before so even though it’s a good dig at someone who is objectively a stuck up cunt, it still has less of an impact due to what was stated previously.

miracle had a standard miracle verse for all its worth lol. kinda simple, but consistent. opener was decent. 2nd bar was lol. closer made me laugh too but only cuz it instantly made me think “damn no wonder homes came at the head so aggressively in the $50 cypher” lmaoo. other than that it was an aight punch.

the clash of styles is an interesting dynamic here. someone who has the tendency to over complicate bars vs someone with the tendency to over simplify bars. in the end it’s consistency & polish in this one.

good shit mengs.


Howl.

[MarkB]

If the archives demise, ur lack of ability will surprises us all, when the mighty fall n u can’t beat a turd
So eat a sweet treat, lemon curdy zest, coz It’ll turn his world backwards n leave him so stressed; he’ll try n eat that word
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I know you was trying to be clever with the backwards line but the punch came across as weak
so too me it lacked impact,also I dont like the usage of the word 'turd' comes over as childish
no punch

It’s hard to save the horrible smell of grime with aftershave to mask ur house n it’s a waste of time
Coz you’ll never go on a night out pull a girl who’s pleased u walk her home
So its always preceded by “leave me da fu” when a girl mentions ur cologne
^
I dont really get this line came off as weak no real punch

My right alone should leave him in need of medical attention so much he can’t front;
I’ll make this pussy bleed n start calling him tampon n not just because he’s a stuck up cunt
^
probally best bar you had, it's played thou

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With the chrome I’ll ruin ya home.. family mourning, ya mother left sick
If slay ever has his 9 millimeter out… hes probably pissing with his tiny little dick
^
weak and the flow was off felt forced

Ya chicks such a slut.. so many dudes have murdered it
Ask people whos the biggest whore they’ll say slay queen… like gay dudes giving encouragement
^
weak, gay jokes not feeling

Ain’t nothing u can do to win this.. losses follow where ever this man goes
Anything u trial end faster than your subscription to bangbros
^
your best bar, it's a shame it's another sex bar but atleast it was set up well

anyway vote miracle