RD1: KnoXville vs. Jack Hallows (OPEN FOR VOTES)

[Wuxia]

Regular Battle
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Voting ends on NO DUE DATES*

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@KnoXville
[MENTION=269110]Jack Hallows/MENTION]

[Jack Hallows]

In… let’s go 24.

[KnoXville.]

10 sounds a lot better

[Jack Hallows]

man fuck this bullshit. i hate cowards.

here…

ayo you live by the sword, you’ll get speared by unruly believers
this fag gets bent over pokes from the rear willingly, no Julius Caesar
i see u like knife bars, but to thrust thru u gotta be worthy
take my slice of advice & get sharper b4 i cut you outta the tourney
concealing murder takes true skill. & this dude’s Dr. Seuss ill
by the time cops come lookin for KnoX’s body it’s halfway to Who?ville
if they guessed why KnoXville had two prominent letters it’d be a safe bet
that he gets high on K & X then pays the debts by engaging in gay sex
& the rest of his name text? him w/ wifey as he’s begun to panic
like “NO, luV. I'LL End all of my stunts & antics!1!1”

[KnoXville.]

I Love Knifes,
.

.

I’m cracking his top. fuck dude I’ll drive thru & start Attacking His spot,
This isn’t a fast food chain when I tell you I’ll be leaving Jack in a box.
Don’t be Lying for the stage, When I get off port it’s drugs, cartels getting hired for the day,
When you get off the port it’s a bunch of faggots literally crying for a raise.
hide ya face. or im Lumpin that u turned bitch quick once I started Dumping Facts,
Even if he wasn’t ‘Exercising in the gym’ the entire Gang will still be Jumping Jack.
I said 10 & you pushed it I tried to save ya cap, you see how you got played with that?
I’ll quickly leave rusted blades all down Jacks Spine Now we can call him razorback.
Heard ya Bitch Swallows Mean, I’ll grab the burner & let these Hollows scream,
I don’t gotta bring blades on Christmas cuz like Art the Clown you’ll be terrified it’ll end hallowsEve.

[Virbius]

Sorry but Jack’s style here didn’t appeal to me. Picking random letters from words/names to flip seems like the worst kind of reach. It’d be funny if it was done as a parody kind of thing, but this didn’t seem like it was going in that direction. There were some alright lines earlier in his verse though.

This was maybe the best form I’ve seen from Knox, some solid name flips and whatnot. I liked it.

Vote- Knox

[bare ryu]

jack hallows

ayo you live by the sword, you’ll get speared by unruly believers
this fag gets bent over pokes from the rear willingly, no Julius Caesar
- cool concept couldve been worded better. pretty sure caesar didnt want to get stabbed willingly
i see u like knife bars, but to thrust thru u gotta be worthy
take my slice of advice & get sharper b4 i cut you outta the tourney
- slick word association but punch falls a lil flat
concealing murder takes true skill. & this dude’s Dr. Seuss ill
by the time cops come lookin for KnoX’s body it’s halfway to Who?ville
- best bar so far. solid punch
if they guessed why KnoXville had two prominent letters it’d be a safe bet
that he gets high on K & X then pays the debts by engaging in gay sex
- u lost me. picking random letters is stretch for a wordplay angle
& the rest of his name text? him w/ wifey as he’s begun to panic
like “NO, luV. I'LL End all of my stunts & antics!1!1”
- same critique as the last bar. concept is weak

knoxville

I’m cracking his top. fuck dude I’ll drive thru & start Attacking His spot,
This isn’t a fast food chain when I tell you I’ll be leaving Jack in a box.
- this was a cool opener just a bit predictable/played
Don’t be Lying for the stage, When I get off port it’s drugs, cartels getting hired for the day,
When you get off the port it’s a bunch of faggots literally crying for a raise.
- lmao this was funny
hide ya face. or im Lumpin that u turned bitch quick once I started Dumping Facts,
Even if he wasn’t ‘Exercising in the gym’ the entire Gang will still be Jumping Jack.
- cool punch
I said 10 & you pushed it I tried to save ya cap, you see how you got played with that?
I’ll quickly leave rusted blades all down Jacks Spine Now we can call him razorback.
- afraid im missing the "jacks spine now" reference if there is one, otherwise its an decent jab
Heard ya Bitch Swallows Mean, I’ll grab the burner & let these Hollows scream,
I don’t gotta bring blades on Christmas cuz like Art the Clown you’ll be terrified it’ll end hallowsEve.
- a bit winded on the final punch. alright closer

mvgt - knox
just more solid structure and concepts. wasnt feeling the cherry picking of letters

[TheShaman]

I can cosign what Virb said about picking random letters.. But the idea of being stabbed in the back vs. taking it from the back was ill. I just think it could have been executed better, e.g. Caesar didn't get stabbed willingly. Knoxville's flow seemed to me a little long winded, but the Jack in a box and jumping Jack and stuff got him the W for me.

Vote: Knoxville.

[mal diction]

i read through Jack's verse ad the only thing i got out of it was a lot of reaching ... nothing really connected

but

Knox fed off of dudes verse:

I said 10 & you pushed it I tried to save ya cap, you see how you got played with that?

so, by default, jack gets my vote

v-jack

[HEK TEAFY]

this was a great battle I had to reread a few times I feel jack is a HW and knows bars were just a bit lighter not quite as clever as JACK......
I had to give it to jacks first two bars vs Knox first two bars

mvgt=jack