32 lines
Until Monday
No biting, stealing and other FL rules
Let’s go!
Printable View
32 lines
Until Monday
No biting, stealing and other FL rules
Let’s go!
@Sardon , should we extend the deadline or cancel the battle? Because today is the final day and you haven’t even checked
You wack fucking faggot
Boy, if you want to battle me, just pm. Why the f are you doing this shit in a battle thread?
And yo, you have -1 game difference, while I have 0… And you call me with this word, how dare are you? XD
Please, had a busy weekend. I'm free to write tonight.Quote:
Originally Posted by MC Shtil
@Sardon ^^
Aight, let’s make ‘til tommorow
"Feudal Negotiations"
Dont buy the propaganda of their penny press
because I am a tool for the government
and I'm loving it, but I'm covered in a bloody mess
As I shovel shit at my expense for their politics....
the pension is my life, so fuck it, I call it quits...
first verse:
Sitting in the war room, lives are bartered away
Harder to say in public light then in the dark of the shade
Placed into eternal sleep, their carving our names
Stars and Stripes, only equal martyrs and graves
On the exact pillar of shame, that WE fought to protect
Stomping our necks, carving our flesh, just stop to reflect
As we, march to our deaths you've lost our respect
afterall, it's costing me cells... while it's costing you CENTS
Can I?...Bargain my life for a bond with a flat rate?
Or am I just a pawn in your game when the bombs aim?
I dedicate my life to the medals I wear
And i dedicate my life to the honor I share
With my brothers in arms, who will happily trade
Their actual arms and the tragic remains
Yo, a samurai, blade drawn, spite in my heart,
World's against me, but I’m rippin’ it apart,
People talkin’ shit, like I’m just a ghost,
But even if I’m it, I’m the freakin’ host.
Enemies lurkin’, shadows in the night,
Tryna take me down, but I’m ready for a fight,
Battle scars on my armor, the pain is real,
I’ll fight to ‘til I die, man, that’s my deal.
Sadness creeping in, yeah, I’m feelin’ very low,
Lost some close friends on the road, they were very bold,
Tears in my eyes, because to accomplish the missión
Those who I know would give they heart on, miss y’all
So what you’ll do to me now? Should I give you a guide?
I’m a lone wolf howlin’ at the pale moonlight,
But I still ‘ve got my friends somewhere there in my heart,
So you’ll never knock me down, I swear to god.
cool battle. i like this kind of topical cuz i get bored reading 600 lines describing a cat looking at a wall clock.
Vote - Sardon
i liked the angle of a soldier/samurai reflecting on their life and how war is just a rich man’s game using others as board pieces. very accurate. relatable for someone who’s been there. cuz in the end it really does boil down to fuck the system, i’m in it for my brothers.
Shtil had a good read too. i liked how direct it was. had some good imagery throughout.
what lead to my decision was the introspective nature of Sardon’s verse. added layers to the theme & gave the verse more depth, while Shtil’s was more to the point and straight forward, which isn’t a bad thing at all, just the other verse had more layers.
good read gents. nice to see something other than diss bars for once.
Howl.
this was an interesting battle. im assuming its a topical of sorts. yall definitely didnt go 32 lines tho lol. since this isnt a typical battle ill express by vote instead of going bar by bar. I feel Sardon was the stronger writer here. he had some pretty nice multies and ententres through-out his piece. however this line
" As we, march to our deaths you've lost our respect
afterall, it's costing me cells... while it's costing you CENTS"
stood out to me in this battle. it was significantly emotion-evoking. i wish the battle was a bit longer so i could see a bit more of your styles but as is, I prefer Sardon as MC Shtil was a little bit too shallow in meaning with his verse.
v/Sardon